مَالِكِيthe ownersالْمَزَارِعِof the farmsالْمُجَاوِرَةِneighboringيَتَرَبَّصُونَare lurkingبِمَزْرَعَةِat the farmالْحَيَوَانَاتِof the animalsالَّتِيthatفَشِلَتْfailedفِيinتَسْيِيرِmanagingشُؤُونِهَاits affairs
The owners of the neighboring farms are lurking at the farm of the animals that failed in managing its affairs.
جَاءَتْThe translation cameتَرْجَمَةٌtranslationصَبْرِيof Sabriالْفَضْلُthe Virtueالْهَيْئَةُthe authorityالْمِصْرِيَّةُEgyptianالْعَامَّةُpublicلِلْكُتُبِfor books,,مِصْرَEgypt,,19971997مَقْبُولَةٌacceptableإِلَىtoحَدٍّsome extentمَاwhatفَجَهْدُthe effortالْمُتَرْجِمُof the translatorظَاهِرٌis apparentوَهُوَand heيَمْشِيwalksجَنْبًاside by sideإِلَىwithجَنْبِthe sideمَعَwithالنَّصِّthe textالإِنْجِلِيزِيِّEnglish..لَوْلَاIf it were not forبَعْضُsomeالْهَنَاتِerrorsالَّتِيthatيُمْكِنُcanالإِشَارَةُto point outإِلَيْهَاto themبِعَجَالَةٍhastily..فَالْمُتَرْجِمُThe translatorكَانَwasيُضِيفُaddingجُمَلًاsentencesتَفْسِيرِيَّةًexplanatoryعِنْدَمَاwhenتَكُونُit isتَرْجَمَتُهُhis translationغَامِضَةٍambiguousأَوْorغَيْرَnotمَفْهُومَةٍunderstandable
The translation of Sabri's work by the General Authority for Books, Egypt, 1997, is somewhat acceptable. The translator's effort is apparent as he walks side by side with the English text. If it were not for some errors that can be pointed out hastily.
وَقَدْAndكَانَwasلِذَكَto thisأَثَرٌan effectأَسْلُوبِيٌّstylisticبَالِغٌgreatعَلَىonلُغَةِthe languageالرِّوَايَةِof the novel,,إِذْasنُلاحِظُwe noticeجُمْلَةًthe sentenceأُورْوِيِلOrwellوَهِيَas itتَمْتَدُextendsوَتَطُولُand lengthens,,بَعْدَمَاafterكَانَتْit wasجُمْلَةًa sentenceمَشْدُودَةًtightوَصَافِيَةًclearوَبَلُّورِيَّةًand crystallineهَذَاThisإِضافَةٌin additionإِلَىtoمَجْمُوعَةٍa groupمِنْofالْأَخْطَاءِerrorsالنَّحْوِيَّةِgrammaticalوَالإِمْلاَئِيَّةِand spellingالَّتِيthatأَثَّرَتْaffectedعَلَىonالْجَانِبِthe aspectاللُّغَوِيِّlinguisticبِكُلِّin everyتَأكيدٍcertainty
And the effect on the language of the novel is great because we notice Orwell's sentence as it extends and lengthens, after it was tight, clear, and crystalline. This is in addition to a group of grammatical and spelling errors that certainly affected the linguistic aspect.
كَمَاAlsoأَنْthatمُتَرْجِمٌthe translatorالنُسْخَةُthe versionالْمِصْرِيَّةُEgyptianيَخْلِطُconfusesأَيْضًاalsoبَيْنَbetweenالأَسْمَاءِthe names,,حَدَثَit happenedذَلِكَthatأَثْنَاءَduringحَدِيثِهِhis talkingعَنْaboutمَزْرَعَةِthe farmفُوكْسْوُودُof Foxwood""الَّتِيthatخَلَطَتْconfusedاسْمَهَاits nameبِاسْمِwith the nameمَزْرَعَةِthe farm""بَيْنْشَفِيلْدِof Pinchfield"",,لِأَنَّbecauseالْأَخْبَارُthe newsالْفَظِيعَةُhorribleشَاعَتْspreadعَنْaboutمَزْرَعَةِthe farmفُوكْسْوُودُof Foxwood((((الَّتِيthatيَمْلِكُهَاowned byفْرِيدْرِيكFrederickالَّذِيwhoبَدَأَتْthe animals beganتَحْقِدُto hateعَلَيْهِtowards him
Also, the translator of the Egyptian version confuses the names; this happened during his talking about the farm of Foxwood, which he confused its name with the name of the farm of Pinchfield, because horrible news spread about the farm of Foxwood that was owned by Frederick, who the animals began to hate.
وَمَاAnd whatيَلْفِتُdrawsالْانْتِبَاهَattentionأَنْthatالرِّوَايَةُthe novelقَامَتْwas conductedبِمُرَاجَعَتِهَاits reviewمُخْتَارٌby MokhtarالسُّوَيْفِيEl-SuwayfiعِلْمًاIt is knownأَنَّthatدَوْرَthe roleالْمُرَاجِعِof the reviewerأَوْorالمُصَحِّحِthe correctorهُوَisحَسَبَAccording toعِبَارَةِthe phraseالْجَاحِظِof Al-Jahiz::الْفَاسِدُthe corruptوَيَزِيدُand increasesالصَّالِحَthe goodصَلَاحًاwell-being
And what draws attention is that the novel was reviewed by Mokhtar El-Suwayfi. It is known that the role of the reviewer or the corrector is, according to the phrase of Al-Jahiz, "the corrupt and increases the good well-being."
كُلُّAllتِلْكَthoseالإِسَاءَاتِabusesاللُّغَوِيَّةِlinguisticوَأَسْلُوبِيَّةٍand stylisticالَّتِيthatلَحِقَتْfollowedبِتَرْجَمَةِto the translationمَزْرَعَةِof the farmالْحَيَوَانِthe animalإِلَىtoاللُّغَةِthe language
All those linguistic and stylistic abuses that followed the translation of the farm of the animal to the language.